Nightmare : I would like to point out a few things with this character that I, personally, think should be adjusted before he is used in any RPs. I would like to point out that though these are just suggestion it is my recommendation that you take them to heart, as many of the people you might use this character with will not be as objective as I am, as I am not playing.
So, that said, here we go.
1. What is a darkness dweller?! It's a race that I have never heard of, and I'm assuming that many others have not as well. And under "Race basic Information: " in your own profile you don't write anything. Without the specifications of a "new" race no one can properly defend, or prepare for battle with something that they know about.
2. Do you realize that your 267 pound character is wearing
733 pounds of armor?! With five inch chest armor, three inch leg armor, and other intensely heavy pieces of armor that are so hugely impossible that I don't even know what to think.
And I know that you do say, "For years he has had to push his body to its maximum strength and offered to do the toughest work, such as building and hauling. He has, as a result, strengthened his body to tremendous strength." But I would say strength of that magnitude requires more of an explanation that's far beyond one sentence.
3. You have his age posted twice. Once it says:
Age:since the Earth was young.
and the other says:
Age:34
And I'm just not sure which one is supposed to be your character's age. Is the first the race's age or...I'm just not sure I picked up what you were aiming for. Either way, if you character is only thirty-four years old the history you have for him seems far-fetched. A man cannot really start building his strength until he has fully developed at around age twenty-one to twenty-two. So that gives him about ten years to be a man that has adjusted to new forms of a world and made it possible to be as strong as you are claiming.
I guess, my biggest problem is that I have NO idea what this race is.
And I'll be honest, really, really honest, Nightmare. I am happy with this profile. It shows VAST amounts of improvement from the first few that I saw from you. You're style is evolving and I'm glad that we've seen some of this.
I just think that a little more detail in the right places (i.e. race description) and some focus on being realistic (i.e. the armor's obvious defiance of physics rules) will get you even farther than you are now.
If you have more questions about anything that I've said, you have my messenger name (this is Skuldhild! ^_^) and can PM me whenever you need.
So have fun, and good luck with this RP!